P2P Reviews on the Evaluation Paper

This paper was a rough draft of the Evaluation paper. Everyone seemed to like the movie I chose (it was "The Dark Knight"). Though some of my group mates wanted more details (given that I included enough details), they considered it as a good review.

Movies to be evaluated

And the nominees are :

1. A Beautiful Mind

2. The Pianist

3. The Constant Gardener

4. The Godfather Triology

5. Borat

Peer Review

What is the most helpful feedback you received today?
The one that struck me the most was told by both Kayla and Hlao. It was simple but important : take a side, as the research paper should be argumentative

Group work
We all got many common suggestions from each other which helped us to pinpoint our own errors. As usual, (and as expected) everyone in the group was nice and really helpful (including me :D).

Focus of Revision
As English is my second language, I need to consider revising my grammar and as well as be argumentative for my topic. Also, I need to fix my way of citing sources as I didn't follow the APA guidelines correctly.

Research Paper

Where are you at in your research paper?
I've already gathered my sources and have confirmed that they are all accurate

What difficulties/fears/concerns you have as for the research paper assignment?
Might become too scientific and perhaps I might change my view on the topic from time to time

How are you thinking to solve them?
For decreasing complex information, I will try to summarise each information by excluding the scientific terms or if it's possible, explaining the scientific terms to the reader. For the latter problem, there's only one solution : concentrate!

Analysis Paper P2P (Peer-2-Peer) Review

We were to analyze each other's analysis paper and this blog post is about the aftermath of the review :)

What were the most unexpected comments you received/heard today?
"Where's your ad"

How did your group work together?
Really well. I was with Boram Kim, Brian Evakise,and Fahad Khan and we worked excellent together (I guess so!). Boram has an excellent sense of analysis and she brought out the points that I would think unnecessary and she also explained the points well. Now let's talk about Brian. That guy's hilarious. Yes, that's the only word that fits perfectly for his description. It was a little bit difficult for me to review Brian's paper as he didn't include the advertisement. But nevertheless, both Fahad and Brian had showed me their advertisements the previous week (yes, Fahad also didn't include the ad).

What will be the focus of your revision/editing after the peer review?
I need to focus on the layout more and should limit my use of fragmented sentences (actually, "you" mentioned it)

The Flying Bird

Tawseq Siraj Chowdhury, a bright student of Mastermind International School (Chittagong) was caught red-handed by his father when he tried to jump out of the roof due to his unexpected O' Level results. But the story ends in a tragic twist of fate as Tawseq, who was determined to jump, pushed his father from his way and his father fell down instead of him. However, being a senior professional Acrobat star, Mr. Siraj saved his own life by doing summersaults in the mid-air. After the incident occurred, Tawseq was nowhere to be found but in his room and Mr. Siraj was given a place in the Chinese Acrobats.

She's a belly-dancer

The famous Italian actress, Sophia Loren, has promised to dance for her favourite team, Nepoli (Italian Football League team) if they manage to come up to the 1st Division (right now, they are down to 4th). Yes she will dance, and she will dance without even wearing a single bit of cloth! It should be stated that, Nepoli has already won their scheduled matches very easily and it is remoured that some star players of Juventus are striving to join Nepoli (I wish I was one of the players :( )

The Mystery of the Stalled Lift

Indian Cricket Team is scheduled to play a test match against their neighbour, Bangladesh. The match is taking place in the Chittagong district of the country. The players are staying in Hotel Peninsula, one of the 5-star hotels of Chittagong. When four players along with Coach Dav Wantmore (Rahul Dravid, Dhoni, Habibul Bashar & Muhammad Ashraful) entered the lift, the electricity went out and the lift got stuck. Due to generator failure, the men inside the lift were horrified. It took three and a half hours to get them out of the lift. But the worst was yet to come. When the lift was opened with a crowbar, a disgusting and somewhat choking smell filled the hallways. Authorities sprayed air-freshner but it was of no use. Dhoni and Dav have become ill. Doctors diagnosed the sad happening and interpreted that at that time in the lift, someone burped or released "body gases" heavily, and being in that atmosphere they became ill. However, doctors are unable to detect anything wrong with Dav Wantmore. They believe that he is just pretending.

What a problem!

A young couple got married and they were getting ready for sex. But a problem arose with the husband. He was having a problem with his "thing" which was not getting erect. Everytime they tried,the sex session failed for the husband. So he talked about the problem with his friend and his friend gave him an idea. His friend told him to go the very top of a tree of a certain forest where the Guru-of-all-solutions lives. So he did what his friend told him to do. The forest was a hard place to visit. He found the tree and it was really long. He got a nice rope like thing and grabbed it and started to climb. He climbed and climbed until he found the Guru aka Guru-of-all-solutions. He told everything about his problem to the Guru.
"Well, I have a solution for that." said the Guru
"What is it?" said the excited husband
"You have to say clearly and loudly "Om" three times and your possession will erect about an inch" said the Guru
"Will that really help, Guruji?" said the husband
"Ofcouse. I am doing it everytime." said the Guru
"But where is your one?" said the husband
"Why, you've climbed up with that young man." finished the Guru